sorry about the procrastination!

Here is one of the many, many poems that I wrote last year.

Also, I am thinking of writing a story, and maybe, once I get the chance, I will post a chapter a month or two...and you can comment and give me feedback. I need it!

Untitled (only because I couldn't think of a title before, and I don't have the time to now)

Haunting chocolatey gazes, a passionate
intensity burning within those eyes, melting
my retinas.
Unspoken secrets sent through sparkling flickers
of the eye, triggereing a lava of excitement
to erupt inside me.
A fiery sensation of love pricks at my skin, dancing
upon my pores at each flash of that
brilliant smile.
Every embrace, a gut-flipping feeling.
Those soft caresses, sweeping across
my face, cling to every bit of skin.
My blood boils underneath those tingling
kisses, numbing my lips.
Whispers of those three desired words,
I love you,
bind me to you, the irresistable, forming a
bond of fidelity.

So what do you think?
Feel free to criticize...it is alright, and I need the criticism anyways.
Oh, and I realize that this is a bit too extreme for my first poem post, but I think this is one of my favorites out of all the things that I wrote. There are more, but this is just one of my favorites.